Monday, October 12, 2009

Evil: The First Chapter

The New Chapter...
Chapter 1- The Competition
Jack Manson hated buses with a passion. It had started with his horrible experiences on the school bus, and escalated on public buses. Now any kind of public transportation made Jack queasy and filled him with the urge to punch out the lights of the closest person in the vicinity.
And of course, he was being forced to take a bus to Smith's Grove.
Smith's Grove was an amazing mansion, fifty-six stories tall, sprawling a mile, and with acres of woods and wildlife as far as the eye could see. Paradise.
The catch was, Jack had to spend his time with twenty-nine other people. He hated people more than public transportation. In fact, people were the reason he hated public transportation.
The reason Jack was spending his time sharing Smith's Grove with people was that there was a competition going on. Thirty people had won a chance to vacation at Smith's Grove. The one person who stayed longest won a special prize.
Jack, as a matter of fact, had no idea how he managed to find himself competing. For his part, he bought the new issue of Fangoria and the ticket had just fallen into his lap. And he was legally obligated to attend the competition.
Now he was stuck on the bus ride to hell.
The bus driver stopped and let on the bus's second passenger; a tall black girl with frizzy brown hair. She wore a leather jacket and short shorts. Yowza. Jack thought he might forgo his antisocial tendencies to hang out with her.
The girl sat down next to Jack.
After about fifteen silent minutes, Jack stuck out his hand. "Hi."
The girl just stared straight ahead.
"I'm Jack Manson."
"Sheera Alomar."
"Oh. Okay."
There were about six more quiet minutes.
"So... you here for the competition?"
"No shit, Sherlock."
Jack was officially in love.
After a while, Jack gave up his, admittedly lame, attempts to instigate a conversation with Sheera.
Jack hated buses with a passion.

7 comments:

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  2. Hey, why does the "No s___, Sherlock." comment by Sheera seem so familiar?

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  3. Never mind, my dad's internet must have just sucked, the site is okay!
    Heheh...false alarm...hehhehheh.......
    btw, is Sheera based off of anybody, or anybody else in the Evil stories? I can geuss that the Jason guy is most likely based off of you.

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  4. I kind of just went with whatever popped into my head, but several people were based off of schoolmates.

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  5. Are you ever going to continue this series?

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